October 16: A Day

1A

1. Work time.

2. Creative Beginnings and Endings. Students received W4: Creative Beginnings and Endings. Students chose two beginning techniques to use in their memoir. They rewrote the beginning or added a new beginning to two chapters. If you were absent, you should download W4 and revise two beginnings using two of the techniques listed on the first page.

HW: Finish complete rough draft of memoir. Print and bring to class Thursday.

2AB

1. “Not to be.” If you’re Hamlet, asking the question, “To be or not to be?” have faith! The answer is Not To Be, when you’re talking verbs, anyway.

Students had time in the computer lab today to revise their memoirs before receiving W5: Not To Be.

We took notes on this handout about how to remove To Be verbs from our writing when using 1) passive voice, 2) linking verbs, and 3) past progressive tense.

It’s okay to use was, were, is, are, etc. in dialogue and when you’re talking directly to the reader. But in many cases, we can eliminate those to be verbs by creatively rearranging the sentence or replacing the word with a more exciting verb.

Then students highlighted all the to be verbs in their memoirs so far and tried to revise as many sentences as possible to remove those verbs. It’s not that you have to take out all to be verbs–you should just ask yourself if there’s a better way of writing those sentences (and occasionally, there’s not).

 2. Creative Beginnings and Endings. Students received W4: Creative Beginnings and Endings. Students chose two beginning techniques to use in their memoir. They rewrote the beginning or added a new beginning to two chapters. If you were absent, you should download W4 and revise two beginnings using two of the techniques listed on the first page.

3. Work time. After students revised their beginnings, they continued writing their scenes.

HW: Finish and print complete rough draft of memoir for tomorrow. Reading for Bryson/Krakauer not due until FRIDAY (I’m a reasonable person).

4A

1. “Not to be.” If you’re Hamlet, asking the question, “To be or not to be?” have faith! The answer is Not To Be, when you’re talking verbs, anyway.

Students had time in the computer lab today to revise their memoirs before receiving W5: Not To Be.

We took notes on this handout about how to remove To Be verbs from our writing when using 1) passive voice, 2) linking verbs, and 3) past progressive tense.

It’s okay to use was, were, is, are, etc. in dialogue and when you’re talking directly to the reader. But in many cases, we can eliminate those to be verbs by creatively rearranging the sentence or replacing the word with a more exciting verb.

Then students highlighted all the to be verbs in their memoirs so far and tried to revise as many sentences as possible to remove those verbs. It’s not that you have to take out all to be verbs–you should just ask yourself if there’s a better way of writing those sentences (and occasionally, there’s not).

 2. Creative Beginnings and Endings. Students received W4: Creative Beginnings and Endings. Students chose two beginning techniques to use in their memoir. They rewrote the beginning or added a new beginning to two chapters. If you were absent, you should download W4 and revise two beginnings using two of the techniques listed on the first page.

3. Work time.  After students revised their beginnings, they continued writing their scenes.

HW: Finish and print complete rough draft of memoir for Thursday. Read one more chapter of Krakauer/Bryson.