Your Name
Ms. Garvoille
Honors English I English I, X period
14 May 2012
Clever Title
Hook connecting to your reader’s life. Your hook should relate to your “implies that” sentence on your prewriting in some way. Transition to Romeo and Juliet—remember to italicize the title. Describe the basics of the scene you are writing about. Transition to give the basics of your artwork. Describe the artwork in 2-5 sentences as if to someone who has never seen it. Thesis statement something like, The artist shows the _____ tone of this scene well/poorly.
Topic sentence that supports your thesis related to imagery—something like, Mercutio’s war imagery creates a belligerent tone, which is present in Prokofiev’s music. Make your first point about the war imagery from the play. Introduce and give a short piece of evidence from the play to support your point about imagery (cite the quote with act, scene, and line number like this: I.v.45-46 or II.ii.3). Explain how the evidence shows that belligerent tone. Make a second point about imagery—your point may be something like, Mercutio uses war imagery again later in the scene. Introduce and give a short piece of evidence to support your point about imagery. Explain how the evidence shows that tone in another sentence. State whether the artwork supports that tone/imagery or not. Make a first point about how the artwork supports or doesn’t support that tone/imagery. Describe a very specific detail from the piece of artwork—for instance, in the recording at about 3:21, the French horns and violins alternate playing the same motif. Explain how that detail supports/contradicts the tone—for example, That alternation suggests two sides fighting, warring back and forth with sound. Conclusion sentence restating whether or not the artwork successfully showed the imagery/tone.
Topic sentence that supports your thesis related to diction—something like, Mercutio’s belligerent diction is present in Prokofiev’s music through the use of marcato emphasis. Make your first point about diction. Introduce and give a short piece of evidence to support your point about diction. Explain how the evidence shows that tone in another sentence. Make a second point about diction. Introduce and give a short piece of evidence to support your point about diction. Explain how the evidence shows that tone in another sentence. State whether the artwork supports that tone/diction or not. Make a first point about how the artwork supports or doesn’t support that tone/diction. Describe a very specific detail from the piece of artwork. Explain how that detail supports/contradicts the tone. Conclusion sentence restating whether or not the artwork successfully showed the diction/tone.
Restate your thesis in new words—something about the success of the artwork in terms of tone. Review all of your evidence in a sentence or two—how did or didn’t the artwork relate to the tone of the play. Explain why the tone in that scene is key to understanding the play as a whole—you have written down this information on your prewriting sheet: ___’s ___ tone implies that ____. You might add another sentence explaining what a viewer would think about Romeo and Juliet if this were his only interaction with the play—what misinterpretations would he have? Is this version actually better than Shakespeare’s in some way? Using your “implies” idea, connect this essay back to the reader’s life, either by returning to your original hook idea, or proposing a new idea.
Work Cited
Shakespeare, William. Romeo and Juliet. PUBLISHING LOCATION: PUBLISHER NAME, DATE. PRINT/WEB.
ALEXA GARVOILLE 